This story opens with a lead describing scientist Ronald Ericcson's work on sperm selection methods. The lead does a great job of getting the reader's attention. I didn't get the impression that this article was about Ericcson though (which it isn't). This introduction is interesting, but I feel like it's length is a bit strained. Perhaps other info on Ericcson can be spread throughout the story. Finally after dwelling on Ericcson, Hanna Rosin states that, "Man has been the dominant sex since, well, the dawn of mankind. But for the first time in human history, that is changing—and with shocking speed." I felt like this was almost a worthless sentence. I gathered this throughout the introduction and didn't need retold.
Like the other Atlantic article we read, Beating Obesity, this contains a lot of information and statistics. Unlike Beating Obesity, I had more difficulty reading every line in this article. I caught myself skimming through the facts and figures. I hardly thought it was an uninteresting subject; as a man, I'm kind of worried now. I really just feel like this article could have been much shorter and still been just as good of quality if not better. I understand the Atlantic may feature more long-form stories, but this one seemed a bit too long for me.
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